E - asttle practice writing persuasive

I am aiming to improve my writing in the following 3 areas sentences, more punctuation, and vocabulary


I will do this by adding more punctuation into my sentences to make them shorter and easier to read and putting my sentences into paragraphs to make them one whole thing and vocabulary  by adding more complex words into my writing to make it interesting


Essay 
Here is why  owning lot of things is good

Owning more stuff makes you merry because then you have more possessions to do with your friends or family. for example, If you own a lot of cars then you can take them onto the road and show other people by taking them to a show or driving around the city also if one of your cars breaks down then you have other cars to drive to rescue you.

Owning a lot of other things like technology which could include new gadgets, phones, and computers can you make you happy because then you can download the latest newest games.

However, this  is why it is bad to own a lot of things 

 If you go away on holiday and leave your house you might have to get other people to look after the house for you because strangers could show up to the house and hop out of their vehicle and break into the house and steal almost everything expensive which you have brought with your own money which you have been saving up for a long time. 

After a long time, you could plausibly run out of money and have to wait for a payday from the bank to your own bank account and that could take up to a week or half a week because they could be busy with other people trying to get things sorted. Some of the expensive things could be really rare and you can't get them anymore or hard to find like gold plating for cars or gold armor from the old old days or going on an extravagant  trip all around the world and paying for 

Travel likes taxis, planes, trains, ships and even hotels. 

Volcanoes

How do they form
Volcanoes are formed when magma from within earth upper mantle works its way to the surface at the surface it erupts to form lava flows and ash deposits over time as the volcano continues to erupt it will get bigger and bigger.



Where
Tambora Indonesia the largest recorded volcanic eruption in history Tambora caused enough starvation and disease to kill approximately 80,000 people. 



When did it last erupt
Mount Tambora is still active and minor lava domes and flows have been recorded during the 19th and 20th centuries. The last eruption was recorded in 1967



Damage
A shattering blast blew the mountain apart on the evening of April 10. The blast pyroclastic flows, and tsunamis that followed killed at least 10,000 islanders and destroyed the homes of 35,000 more and the economic impact of the eruption is estimated at 1 billion dollars.


Stories/myths

The debris also caused a moderate-sized tsunami. In all, so much rock and ash were thrown out of Tambora that the height of the volcano was reduced from 14,000 to 9,000 feet. The worst explosions were heard hundreds of miles away. The eruptions of Tambora also affected the climate worldwide. The steam off the volcano formed 6 months before the eruption the effect of the volcano can be felt 300 miles away the people who lived in Indonesia in 1815 had to survive a year without summer because of the ash from volcano covering the sky and not moving.

 

4 spatulas of potassium iodide in 20ml of water the potassium speeds up the reaction 

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Dishwashing liquid

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